POEM HELP PLEASE? :)

Okay, so I wrote 2 middle parts and i can’t decide which one i like better.

 

Time will make things better

Time will make you smile

Time will take the pain away

And make it worth your while

Time may bring you rain

When you are in a storm

I promise you it will not last

As long as you keep warm

Time will heal wounds

That seemed so hard to mend

It won’t become your enemy

Instead become your friend.

 

Time will make things better

Time will make you smile

Time will take the pain away

And make it worth your while

Time may bring you tears

It may also bring you pain

This may seem so hard and lonely

When all that’s there is rain

Time will heal wounds

That seemed so hard to mend

It won’t become your enemy

Instead become your friend.

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5 thoughts on “POEM HELP PLEASE? :)

  1. I like the first better. The part in the middle is… Well I am not good at taking poems apart. It seems kinda confused and then getting it’s pattern again. I like that, suits the topic you chose.
    Stand upright, Jona

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